English is my second language. Help me improve the copy on my landing page.
As English is my second language, I am not doing a great job at explaining/selling what my web app does well. The app i am building helps you in creating beautiful mockups for your designs. You upload your images, and we put that image on top of iPhone devices or a browser frame. It is a mockup generator basically.
I need your help with the following.
- Succinct tag line
- General improvement of the copy I used in the Tasty features section.
- Any feedback you can think of is also very much welcome.
Finally here is a link to the beta page of my web app.
https://beta.cleanmock.com/
P.S: I would appreciate it if you don't share the beta link with anyone outside of IH.
Thank you!
Hey @tekeste site looks great!
A couple of thoughts for you:
The headline and tagline don't seem quite right. What do you see as the main use for the product and could this be better reflected in the tagline?
In the Tasty features section, some of them seem doubled up i.e. real devices and all devices. Maybe reduce down the number of features, it looks like there might be 4 main features?
@jamesfmac
Wow you are so right in saying that we should move to a single CTA. I am fairly confident that no one is going to click the the Pro button immediately without needing some convincing. Based on your feedback I am a quick mockup video, let me know what you think should be improved.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v7WVO9uiYoI&feature=youtu.be
Hey @tekeste nice work on the video. I think that works much better!
Happy to take a look once you've got copy for the upsell :)
Thanks i can change the text on the buttons.
For now I will be offering just that one tier.
You've done a great job @tekeste !
Some random ideas:
Hope this helps.
Thank you @richp_ ! I the tag line you suggested and are on point with UI feedback you gave.
Hey @tekeste, congrats for your launch!
I am not a native speaker neither, however one piece of feedback I could give you is to specify what you mean by "Ideas".
As a visitor I was asking questions as: Is CleanMock a presentation builder (like Prezi?), or are you a presentation tool like Invision? Or something else altogether? It was hard for me to understand where you're positioning your product.
I also think your website could profit from having some more copy, you only have headers and titles and nothing much else. Your comment here would already help: "You upload your images, and we put that image on top of iPhone devices or a browser frame. It is a mockup generator basically.". You can probably make a derivative of it somewhere very central, maybe in your hero section even, while reducing the image size (which didn't help understand the product).
With that said, I love the work on the UI elements of the landing page. It's very readable and the colors are pleasant.
Best of luck!
Like you mentioned there is a major lack of text in the website. I am the maker of the app, I don't even know what I am trying to sell! :)
I will work more on adding descriptive text to the features section.
Thank you for your input!
The landing page looks awesome 😍
I would change the main title a bit. "Present Ideas" can have multiple meaning. It can refer to the time, gift or the act of showing. I'm trying to think of something now but I can't seem to come up with an alternative. Maybe something along the lines of "Show your ideas".
Everything else seems fine 👌 Good luck with the launch! 🚀
I agree that the title is too vague, we need to use real statements and words than marketing catch phrases at this point.
Thank you!! Go Maker's Kitchen!