Writing Feedback February 5, 2020

Can anyone please review this short text?

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As a non-native English speaker, sometimes I write really bad English, I was wondering if someone could review it and correct me?

I have been trying Grammarly, which I like a lot but is not the same.

This is the text. and if you need to see the context is here

Color Schemes.
The color schemes that we are gonna work are based on the ones in Colors & Fonts. We are going to take a Design system and apply the chosen color palette.

Files you get.
A link to a Figma workspace with all colors, gradients and font pairing collection will provided so you can copy it to Figma. Also, you recieve the .fig file, SASS and JS files with the variables to download from GitHub if you want to implement the colors right away.

What's the UI ?
The color schemes will be presented on a Design System including buttons, forms, inputs and components.

Thank you so much I really appreciate this.

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    A couple of thoughts:

    "gonna" is sort of a slang and shortening of "going to", I'd use the later for anything professional. I'd also extend this and get rid of both instances in this paragraph of "going to". This is weak voice, and doesn't add anything to the copy. You'd end up with:

    "The color schemes that we work with are based on the ones in Colors & Fonts. We take a Design System and apply the chosen color palette."

    You're also missing the capitalized "s" on system, notice you capitalize it later in the copy.

    "Files you get" - I'd capitalize "You" and "Get" to stay consistent with the other headers.

    I'd change "if you want to" to "so you can" - this feels a bit more active, but both make sense so it's a matter of preference.

    change "collection will provided" to "collection will be provided" missing word is a bit jarring to read.

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      Sorry for my delay, I have been driving for 5 hours.

      First of all thank you so much for taking the time, really kind and nice.

      I understood, it sounds better, it was definitely jarring. I have used some of your text actually. It sounded pretty good.

      I probably forgot to capitalize them, it happens so often...

      thank you so much @peterj1994

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    Hi, your website looks good. Here are a few suggestions on the texts -

    1. Color Schemes:
      a. 'gonna' can be substituted with 'going to', this makes it more apt.

    A little rephrasing of your copy -
    "Select a color scheme from various options available in Colors & Fonts. Apply the selected color palette to your design in a few simple steps."

    1. "Get a direct link to Figma workspace with all the details like colors, gradients and font pairing collection. Receive .fig, SASS and JS files for immediate use."

    2. "Preview the color scheme with all UI components like buttons and forms on the design."

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      Sorry for my delay, I have been driving for 5 hours to north Finland...

      Thank you so much for taking the time, that's really kind. I took your advice and used some of your ideas too.

      Now is live.
      Thank you so much.