As a "first step" to building in public, I'm working on a landing page for my eventual SaaS product. It's a sort of "Business Operating System" for custom product fabricators. It's the field my existing brick-and-mortar business is in, so I'm scratching my own itch here.
So I'm a bit close to this and need some help with the wording of my value proposition, here it is:
The Command Center for your Custom Product Business.
Organize your quoting, proofing, client communications, ordering, production scheduling, and accounting all in one place. Designed specifically for garment decorators, sign fabricators, small- and large-format printers, vehicle wrappers, and promo product companies.
"Take Control" (CTA button)
What do you think? I feel it's too wordy, but I'm not sure how to condense it as I am serving a very specific niche and my product is very much a full suite of tools.
All feedback / suggestions welcome and appreciated.
After sleeping on it, I've made the following adjustment (bolded):
I think this is better, but I'm not sure I'm quite there yet.