Am I communicating value?

Hi
Just dealing with the above-the-fold area...

1. Hierarchy between main heading and sub heading should be much clearer.

2. This is also a lot of text and doesn't make it clear why people would use your system rather than stick to Click-up for PM and Quickbooks for accounts for example. What problems are you solving that other PM software can't? Why did you build this software? If you had a comparison chart alongside Click-up, Asana, Trello etc how would you perform? For which criteria would you "beat" the others?

3. Screenshot is too small and blurry to see anything. As there is a lot going on in the screenshot I would try clipping out a few small crops and stacking them up in a nice montage. A task being checked, a chart, show a few of the key features in close up.

4. CTA - needs colour. Reword it to "get started for free" but also add some info about it being "free" underneath. Is a credit card required? Is it free forever or is this a trial?

5. Social proof - you need testimonials from real companies using the product on real projects, plus ideally they should mention their favourite features.

Hope that helps for now.

Steve

I run a SaaS business so perhaps I'm in your target audience. Here's my notes as I read through your landing page. They may sound a bit harsh, but I think it's best to be honest because dishonest advice is not useful.

1. "Osabox helps your business stay organised and move work forward."

Means absolutely nothing to me.

2. "Whether its a new project, employees, payroll, new clients, new to-do lists, new invoices, receipts, timer billing, we have made it easier for you to generate and manage them with osabox."

Product seems to lack focus.

3. Screenshots don't look good.

4. "Are you thinking of remunerating your staff?" This is a really funny sentence. Paying your staff generally isn't optional.

5. "YOU CALL US" It doesn't seem to have a country code, if it doesn't, it should have one.

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I'd say you need to go after a small problem, and solve it perfectly. What you've built seems like a not very good version of JIRA.

I have taken a look at the landing page. Honestly, I'm a bit confused exactly what the product does and how it can help my business.

I see that it does Project management and Payroll. But it's unclear how these tie together, and how Osobox does it better than my existing workflows.

I think being more specific about what specific problems you are solving would help.

Is there a specific niche you are targeting?

My first impression is that the copy was written by a non-native English speaker. Try to have someone who speaks English proficiently go over your copy.

Thanks for commenting on my request.
I have tried to twerk with the few suggestions I got.
There is a new landing page.
Kind regards
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I'm a designer/developer so perhaps not the right target group but I have created some high converting landing pages for SaaS products in my career, here are a few tips:

1. Images: Try using a screenshot app such as https://www.brandbird.app/. It's a quick way of creating beautiful screenshots.

2. Headlines (H1, H2, etc.) make the font-weight bold so it stands out a bit. Perhaps use another color that has a higher contrast.

3. There is a lot of white-space on mobile devices. Try to make the site more compact on mobile devices so that visitors don't have to scroll a bunch :)