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An amazing copywriter reviewed my headline

It started with me asking for help on Linkedin because I was stuck creating a new headline for our startup.

Here is my post >>>>

I think I have hit a wall here so I need your help.
I am not feeling great about any of the headlines but some of them are an improvement compared to what I had on Monday!

Which headline will make you read more?

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  2. With FigPii you will go from randomly guessing to making data-driven decisions

  3. With FigPii you will go from randomly guessing to creating a brilliant user experience that delights your visitors.

  4. With FigPii you will watch, analyze, and act on your customer data

Or, someone might suggest something even better :)
--- End of post

I was stuck and the Linkedin community jumped in to help.

Then, something amazing happened.

Joel Klettke who is a well know copywriter ( I have been following Joel for over a year but never talked to him directly) commented on my post.

He suggested a few better headlines.

But he did more

Joel wrote his own post mentioning my dilemma and asked other copywriters to help.

Joel's post!

I got so much feedback and too many good headlines.

I will be running several AB tests to see which headline works better.

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    Joel is an excellent copywriter and seems like a great guy. I've watched a number of his interviews, and he drops a ton of knowledge.

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      He is very generous with his knowledge.

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    This comment was deleted 4 years ago.

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      100% true. Sometimes it is easier to say, I need help. There are plenty of people who are willing to lend a helping hand.

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