Another round of marketing page feedback
Hi all,
I made many changes to my marketing page after getting feedback here. Also, I got great feedback from Indie Swarm by @etrainey. In addition, I repositioned the product from business goals management to strategic business planning.
I would love to get your feedback again. One specific feedback that I'm looking for is mainly from those with English as a first language. I use Grammarly premium with everything I write on the marketing page, yet some of the feedback was related to the fact that I'm a non-native English speaker
Hi Ronen,
Here are a few copy changes that I would suggest to make the sentences work better in English. I hope this helps :)
“Empowering Small Business Owners For Success” ➡️ “Empowering Small Business Owners To Succeed” or “Setting Up Small Business Owners For Success”
“Goalskeeper.io is a web app that helps small business owners to create, manage and achieve their strategic business planning.” ➡️ “Goalskeeper.io is a web app that helps small business owners to create, manage and achieve their strategic business plans.”
“I'm not sure how to create strategic business planning. How can goalskeeper.io help me?” ➡️ “I’m not sure how to do strategic business planning. How can goalskeeper.io help me?”
“I already have strategic business planning. Why do I need goalskeeper.io?” ➡️ "I'm already doing strategic business planning. Why do I need goalskeeper.io?"
“Does my data is secured?” ➡️ “How is my data secured?”
“What goalskeeper.io do automatically for me?” ➡️ “What does goalskeeper.io do automatically?” or “What can goalskeeper.io help me automate?”
WOW, thanks a lot for the specific tip. I hoped to get something like, "you still having grammar issues there."
I really appreciate it.