Would appreciate some honest feedback on a landing page I'm targeting with Facebook ads.

I'm not in your target market but I would try to make the text more scannable. Right now a big wall of text.

I would add some heading, bullets, short paragraphs, etc.

Here is a good example of long copy https://letsfreckle.com/

Check this blog that explains the logic: https://stackingthebricks.com/6-landing-page-mistakes/

A/B test and use video vs text :)

Agree with cmaggi, the text is quite hard to read, here are some points that may help:

• Left-aligning the text
• Using bullet points
• Shorter paragraphs, this is extreme but check how short the paragraphs are for Neil's site: https://neilpatel.com/consulting/, 1-3 lines long
• Some icons to break up the text?

As an aside, I like the image, works really well.

Hi Obie,

I think the landing page looks good. I thought the copy was good too. I think if people are interested will read though the longer copy.

The question I had while reading, was why are you doing this now vs continuing producing and DJ'ing?

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