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Critic my landing page 👊 🧐

Hi all,

Working on a landing page for my experimental idea. Pwned Report. Don't hold punches ;)

https://www.figma.com/proto/T9uUbwxQf1i7YsPb8GnKAE/Pwned-Report?node-id=1%3A2&scaling=min-zoom&page-id=0%3A1

on December 7, 2022
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    I like how direct it is. There is no vague marketing language so that's good.

    1. Capitalize the links in your header. You're probably already going to do this, but I wanted to point it out to be sure. For example "Home" rather than "home".

    2. I would make your tagline stand out more and enlarge the text. As well as make the text white for more contrast. Something like:

    "Frictionless, no-install phone scanner. Find and eliminate compromises and suspicious activity"

    1. I would put the benefits section before the "featured on" section, since it's more important, and would make the taglines shorter as well. Keep in mind people have very low attention spans when you're selling to them, so everything needs to be succinct.

    2. If you've got it developed already, you should add short demonstrative video.

    Speaking of roasting, I'm releasing my website in a couple of days and launching my product even later on and would love some feedback. If you have the time, check out my twitter where I post about my product and building in public. https://twitter.com/therealetch

    FYI, I'm developing an AI API that allows devs to build AI apps by accessing the AI on our cloud servers through an API.

    I also post reports here: https://www.indiehackers.com/product/evoke

    Good luck on your app! Feel free to DM me the product hunt link on launch on twitter and I'll be sure to support.

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      Thank you @RichardGao. Solid suggestions, I will incorporate your suggestions

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    I like the simplicity and straightforwardness. The quick bio could be just a bit more fine tuned. Is it spyware that you're helping scan for, hacked passwords, or what?

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      Hi @SnowOwl It checks for spywares, malicious apps & vulnerabilities on your device. Do you know https://haveibeenpwned.com/ ?

      This is haveibeenpwned but for your device. The former checks if your password is hacked/compromised, while PwnedReport checks if your device is compromised

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    Clean, simple, looks good.
    I think an explanation of the basic steps would help. Not sure how this would work. I see you mention (in another comment) something about an 'instant app'? Not sure what this is, though... Is this Android/iPhone only?
    So this page would only do something when checked on a phone? What if I visit on my PC/laptop?

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      Hi @BoilahM

      Yes. I think i need to better explain the process involved.

      1. This is Android only
      2. The scan happens on your mobile device. Hence, if you open the site on your pc, it will ask to enter your email address so it can email you a link which you need to open on your device
      3. Clicking the email link will launch what's called "instant app". Its a light weight (~1-2 MB) app.

      Email - https://dl3.pushbulletusercontent.com/aPfg1D6SrHeMA3qnUIwAfN3Gx42co70U/Screenshot_20221209-102039.jpg

      Process involved - https://dl3.pushbulletusercontent.com/Jx5B4UW0R4fKp5pPJBnYN9kODmHMCW7M/pwned_report_email_1.mp4

      How can I creatively show the process involved (See vid above) in the landing page?

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    It's not clear at all how you are about to perform the promised action.

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      Thank you. Do you think a visualized illustration of the steps involved help? Typically the scan happens as follows

      1. User clicks "Scan" Button
      2. User is redirected to an Instant app
      3. Scan starts
      4. Results are shown

      #1 & #2 are initiated/processed on landing page
      #3 & #4 are performed on the app