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Feedback needed for my landing page

Hey all,

I appreciate any feedback/review of my first landing page. Let me know if the value proposition is clear and if there any improvements to make

Visit here: https://ecomstock.co/

THANK YOU!

on December 29, 2020
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    My 3 main suggestions.

    1. You have the right headline in the wrong position
    The readers want to know if you'll address their problem or some useless BS.
    Your title is not super clear in this sense. Viceversa the following headline is spot on: "Amazon Dashboard is Not Enough- Is it?"

    If I have that problem, you get my attention. Otherwise, I'm not the right reader for your page.
    Plus if you start with a question around the reader's problem, the whole copy gets easier. After that title, you present what result you promise to the reader: "Plan your next step with intelligent inventory forecasts".

    (BTW no predict, yes plan. You're not writing poetry so shorter words are better.)

    2. Features matter only if they give benefits
    The reader doesn't care about the features of your product. He wants to know how it will help him eliminate his problem.

    In your copy the "benefits" has to explain this: "how feature X will help you with the problem".

    So better to unify those 2 sections, and eliminate boring repetitions (friendly support, dedicated support...)

    (If at that point you have extra space, maybe add some about info)

    3. Why you?
    What makes Ecomstock different from competitors? It's not clear to me. You highlight many features/benefits but no uniqueness.

    • Macbook Air was the thinnest lap top.
    • Tesla Cybertruck has a design different from any other pickup.

    What distinguish you from the others? If it isn't clear the customers will wonder if he can find the same offer for a cheaper price.

    Let me know if this makes sense for you.

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      Thank you so much Samuele for taking the time to write these valuable suggestions. They all make sense.