Feedback on landing page targeted at solo entrepreneurs & freelancers
https://crescendo.app
Long-time lurker, first-time poster :)
For solo entrepreneurs and freelancers, I'm curious if Crescendo (https://crescendo.app) clearly makes sense and if you'd use it. Very open to any and all feedback on copy/design!
Congrats on the first post :)
Really like this idea - would love to see a more concrete and live example once we get to "The System" section. Everything leading up to this is helpful and flows well! I'm just curious about what the system actually entails.
Lastly, my personal opinion is to change up the description at the top to be focused on the customer's received value and not what you provide. So, instead of:
"We provide highly driven people with systems and accountability to maintain optimal performance in their personal health, productivity, and learning."
I prefer:
"Achieve new levels of performance in health, productivity, and learning with a customized tracking and accountability system that matches your ambition."
Hope that helps!
Here are my spontaneous thoughts as I read the landing page:
"Become your best self. We got your back."
It must be about personal dev
"We provide highly driven people with systems and accountability to maintain optimal performance in their personal health, productivity, and learning."
Ok... sounds broad. I'm skeptical on how you can measure my productivity and learning
"Consistently acheive your performance goals"
Small typo.
"Get a Performance Coach who helps you architect the right goals and reach them through accountability and feedback."
How do they know what's the right goal for me on nutrition, mental health, productivity exercise, skill building ? They don't have any data point on me, and I don't want to spend 10h explaining my life
"Get a customized goal tracking system created by you and your Performance Coach where you can easily see how you’re progressing, what actions affect your outcomes, and analysis on your actions."
There is a fitness app screenshot that already seems to track progress. Do you want me to pay a remote human being to tell me to use fitbit/nike/my fitness pal?
Hope it helps
Once I looked at the images and read the full sentence on the landing page, I understood the offer. But at first glance, I thought you were an outsourcing agency of some sort that provided people to perform tasks.