Feedback on my LP

Hello there. First of all, congrats on launching the website! 👏

Now some feedback:

From the first look and before scrolling, I have no idea what this is about. H1 is a wasted opportunity.

Instead of

Welcome to OURS

I'd try something like

Yoga lovers' club

(or if it's something else, describe that something else)

Subtitle text is also vague.

Especially this part:

From learning traditional Yoga online, to IRL experiences in the Himalayas

What does it mean?

Does this website give me experience of learning yoga online, IRL xp of Himalayas and everything in between?

Does it help me relocate to Himalayas 🤪?

Maybe a small change can make it a lot clearer. For example:

Want to learn traditional Yoga online? Want to experience yoga in the Himalayas IRL? <MAYBE ONE MORE QUESTION HERE?> Come join OURS!

"Membership" button on top seems a bit weird to me. Maybe something like "Become a member?". A small thing, but had to click to understand what it would do.
The about section could come alive by a background image featuring some of your members doing their thing. Or maybe not, I am not sure It just doesn't look exciting.

Also, since at that point I still have no clue what this is all about, instead of telling me who your members are, first maybe tell me what your club is about.

I think that's it from me. Congrats again, and good luck!

And sorry if my words sound harsh, I am merely warming you up so that you can bring your worst and burn my landing page to the ground! 😅 Here it is: https://www.indiehackers.com/post/roast-my-landing-page-i-will-roast-yours-6b35f5f999

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Hello there. First of all, congrats on launching the website! 👏

Now some feedback:
1. From the first look and before scrolling, I have no idea what this is about. H1 is a wasted opportunity.
Instead of

Welcome to OURS

I'd try something like

Yoga lovers' club

(or if it's something else, describe that something else)
1. Subtitle text is also vague.
Especially this part:

From learning traditional Yoga online, to IRL experiences in the Himalayas

What does it mean?

Does this website give me experience of learning yoga online, IRL xp of Himalayas and everything in between?

Does it help me relocate to Himalayas 🤪?

Maybe a small change can make it a lot clearer. For example:

Want to learn traditional Yoga online? Want to experience yoga in the Himalayas IRL? <MAYBE ONE MORE QUESTION HERE?> Come join OURS!
1. "Membership" button on top seems a bit weird to me. Maybe something like "Become a member?". A small thing, but had to click to understand what it would do.
2. The about section could come alive by a background image featuring some of your members doing their thing. Or maybe not, I am not sure It just doesn't look exciting.
Also, since at that point I still have no clue what this is all about, instead of telling me who your members are, first maybe tell me what your club is about.

I think that's it from me. Congrats again, and good luck!

And sorry if my words sound harsh, I am merely warming you up so that you can bring your worst and burn my landing page to the ground! 😅 Here it is: https://www.indiehackers.com/post/roast-my-landing-page-i-will-roast-yours-6b35f5f999
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  Hey buddy, really appreciate all of this feedback, it's in line with what we have been hearing from others- too complex, language needs to be more relatable, needs to be livened up. Not harsh at all, this is great. Have replied with my feedback to your post!
  
  Nidhish Tulsiani
  
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  5 years ago
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