Harsh People Only
This is my newsletter, I am in college right now and I have 4 subscribers in it. Be extremely harsh and give me blunt feedback on your thoughts of it.
This is my newsletter, I am in college right now and I have 4 subscribers in it. Be extremely harsh and give me blunt feedback on your thoughts of it.
First picture I saw on click was too much to handle
Health and Wellness doesn't tell me anything
I'd recommend on positioning your brand more into biohacking (this is more unique and pretty easy to understand with a little context)
You mentioned dojo but this seems a little random and sudden in terms of language
Last paragraph sounds super generic and provides little emotional or logical appeal to take action
As a whole reading the about didn't make me think of anything unique that would trigger an action or position your brand as memorable in my mind. You need to highlight more of a problem and maybe biohacking as the solution.
Also there's no posts :)
thanks for the feedback, already applying what you mention and making changes in the website. I know I started the newsletter today and all the subscribers are from insta or reddit, I am going to be posting every Sunday.
When you launch it's good to have an initial post so people get a sense of what's coming (even if it's just a slightly longer version of your about)
Also, I think the newsletter has potential because it sounds like a big market that's really cool and valuable but I think the way that your explaining it makes it sound to close to broader health articles (biohacking sounds cool and like a way to receive physical health value without making major life changes).
so, focus more on that niche than in health in general
Yeah based on the premise of the newsletter it seems biohacking is a subniche in the broad niche of health.
Health is so broad you'll have trouble resonating a message without a unique hook. I think biohacking could be your unique hook (based on the current content).
I made a lil preview talking about sunlight it's benefits and actionable steps,
Took a look and I think this really helps show the value that you can provide!
One tip I'd recommend is taking that sneak peak and turning it into a small first article.
You could copy and paste this today then market it on IH, Reddit, etc before Sunday so your Sunday post has a few viewers ready to read :)
If I see your Sunday post on IH I'll make sure to give it a read!
yeah, that is a pretty good idea. I am gonna do that rn.
I actually liked the research part. It was interesting and very easy to adopt in my daily routine. Just have to remove the shades while going for work ;)
Now the knowledge part is good and you have tried to make it concise as much as you could i am sure. The first para, the biohacking and the last para seems to me are saying the same thing, don't you think ?
May be you can say all of that in just 2-3 lines ? That would be a lot cleaner.
That's just how i felt ;)
yeah, I am going to change that right now, thanks for the feedback G.
I'd highly recommend writing a few articles that demonstrate what type of content you will be writing before trying to find any distribution / market your blog.
I'm not sure I've ever subscribed to a blog/newsletter based on what they promise to write: only what they've already written.
so its better for me to have a little preview of how it is going to be
absolutely.
people need to 'experience' value before signing up. and 'experience even more value' before payment. Telling someone about xyz will only get a some, having people experience a snippet of your content/ideas/vision, that gets alot more.
I added the preview, thanks for the feedback catalyst.
that is a good point, I should have a little preview
The top sentence in bold should say what it is, or what is in it for me.
I lost interest when I saw I had to read a paragraph to possibly know what it was. Pictures didn't help at all.
thanks for the feedback Kelly, going to change that on the website asap!!
Do you have your landing page in a collaborative tool (there are several). This way members can see your latest iteration and jump in, to further contribute. I am eager to see how you have gone with implementing the first round of feedback.
No, I do not have a proper landing page, so in the first post I am going to ask for comments so I have a bigger engagement