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If you spend more than 6hrs /day on your computer work. I might have a solution, but majorly, lmk if my landing page is easy to grasp it.

The Pitch:
I'm working on a tool to help reduce eye strain for people spending more than 6 - 8 hours everyday in front of their computer.


The Landing Page:
https://9to5extension.carrd.co


The Request:
Please provide feedback because the product might be beneficial to you. As a thank you I will try my best to offer something in return.


Thank you.

Twitter? - https://twitter.com/veerxyz

on December 4, 2022
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    Some notes:

    I wasn't distracted by the eyes in the background, but I read you toned them down. It's okay and a hint to the eye-strain thing, I guess. Wouldn't miss them if they were gone.

    Wrt to the previous comments on 'Dr. Ipi', YMMV; some people will find it 'cute' others may indeed find it 'childish'. Consider an option to turn this on/off, or be able to choose between different styles

    From the screenshot, it looks like it will work only in the browser, correct? If so, what about people stuck behind a Word processor/CAD tool/spreadsheet/...?

    As to the landing page, I oddly felt a strain on my eyes when I scrolled down and on the dark background suddenly had bright white/orange/yellow blocks. Maybe tone that down a bit as well?

    HTH. All the best with this!

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      These points are valid.

      1. Noted, will try to not focus energy on that.
      2. Yes, I am planning to make that optional now that i've had mixed reviews.
      3. There is a tool for that i came across and it was only $10 or $15 lifetime or yearly. I cannot quite grasp its name at the back of my head. I am planning to keep it to browsers atm.
      4. That was a UI/UX designer suggestion and thought that would make it differentiate between BG and FG contrasts. So this one will remain as it is, but other points have been duly noted.

      Yes, it did help. Thanks.

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    I'm in your target group. I just opened your website. Here are my thoughts.

    The URL is weird. As is the over the fold area. I see no information about your product without scrolling. Instead I see creepy animated eyes popping out from the background which add no value to your website.

    Having a cartoon character introduce itself to me as Dr. Ipi seems condescending and reminds me of Clippy the Microsoft Word helper tool. It flopped for Microsoft. There is a reason for it flopping. No one likes fake characters telling them what to do.

    While I scroll down, the creepy eyes are still following me on the background, making it difficult to read anything from your actual pitch. Do you want me to watch your animated background or read your content?

    Your product seems very simple but you are doing yourself a disfavor with this overly complicated and poorly usability optimized website.

    I think this is an interesting idea and with good usability, I might use this. But I really hope there are no animated fake doctor characters in the app telling me to look away from the screen.

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      Also, i noted the animated eyes you speak of and it may be distracting.
      So I have not completely eliminated it but made it dimmer than before, and in close color range to the black background and so it feels subtle.

      This point was helpful, thanks.

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      The URL is a subdomain from carrd. I had to quickly setup a landing page after arvidkahl asked me to give him more details on the product.

      I see, I used to kind of like clippy, but im gettin 50-50 reviews on this.

      Scrolling issue, well I have heard this the second time now, so thanks for this.

      Okay, so it was too simple and other reviewers said no dynamism no effort just a static page so kind of evolved from that.

      I see your pov on the animated fake doctors, but that's 50-50 on the take. I believe since its 50-50 like and dislike in the starting stage i can keep that optional.

      Thanks for your time.

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    Hi, what an idea! I'm definitely in a target group. But yeah here's how I can help:

    1. It's too bad that I need to scroll down to know anything. I was immediately sold when I understood that this is the kind of advisor who helps me keep my eyes in good shape while I work. Did you consider having more description headline + description on a hero section, maybe paired with a graphic of a desktop with one of the doc's recommendations? It's so easy to understand that people should get the idea during the first few seconds.
    2. I wish the graphics were bigger you know. My eyes do hurt and I hate looking at tiny pictures. I believe that's exactly who you want to target and you should be thoughtful of their experience.
    3. I've got some mixed feelings regarding the whole "scientific evidence" section. I mean I get it even without it, my eyes hurt and I could use some pro's advice. Do you want me to jump to some article and possibly never come back? I know you recommend bookmarking but people see a link -> they click. IMHO you will do better without it.
    4. This doc is so cute. I'd love to see more of him :)

    Hope that helps! Feel free to follow up on anything.
    Olek

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      Yes, it's just a quick landing page i ended up with after Arvid (@arvidkahl ) asked me to tell him more about the product.

      About the eyes hurting, I am hoping that anyone sees it through their desktop and not phone because my target audience is desktop users? But if you saw it via atleast 13" screen and still the eyes hurt, i will do something about it.

      Thanks for all the points though the scientific thing, I want that to be optional, because the fear of ending up on an article and not coming back is real yet to support my statement in detail is the reason that is an optional thing there.

      Oh, the #4, some like it, some don't, I've had mixed reviews on the 'doc', haha.

      May I dare to ask if you have preregistered yourself and if not, let me know the reason please ?

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        Makes sense.
        I'm using 17" macbook and the content only takes about 25-30% of the total width.
        I've preregistered myself :)