I'll rewrite your landing pages Copy.
Hey there,
I am testing out a new idea where I will have my users enter their URL and have my bot rewrite all their copy for fluency and SEO purposes. But in the meantime, I have been helping companies rewrite their copy on their landing pages manually with my software and that's what I would like to offer you today. There is no charge except for if you would like to give me some feedback that would be great. Just paste your URL below and ill get to it ASAP
Hi Aiden,
Could you have a look over mine please - http://rehat.work/
Thank you
https://rehat.work/
Old (current): Health
During COVID-19, we see an increase of people working from home for the first time. It is difficult to pace yourself during working from home. There are no water-cooler or coffee break discussion like how the office environment provides.
This can lead to burn out, stress and even RSI. By using a timer like Rehat, these health related issues can be avoided.
New:Health
For the first time during COVID-19, we saw an increase in the number of people working from home. It is difficult to adapt to your own rhythm when working at home. There is no discussion of how to provide a water cooler or tea break time in an office environment.
This can lead to burnout, stress and even RSI. By using a Rehat as timer, you can avoid these health-related problems.
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
Thank you Aiden ++
Great offer - thanks: Could you check out the copy for the landing page we're developing now? https://streempay-testing2.carrd.co/
Here is mine! podstatus.com
Would be very much appreciated- www.vesselathletics.co
www.vesselathletics.co
Old (current): Our removable hydration pack allows for on-the-go hydration without having the need to hold a water bottle in your hand during the entirety of your run!
New: Our detachable water pack allows you to hydrate anytime, anywhere without having to hold the water bottle in your hand during the entire running process!
Old (current): I first got into long-distance running three years ago. At the time, I struggled to find a wearable hydration product that would allow me to seamlessly bring water with me on my runs
New: I participated in the long-distance race for the first time three years ago. At the time, I was struggling to find a wearable moisturizing product that allowed me to bring water seamlessly while running
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
Hey! Thank you so much for this. This is great.
Would love some thoughts on www.eduflow.com
https://www.eduflow.com/
Old (current): Build an incredible learning experience.
Make learning and teaching more effective with active participation and student collaboration.
New: Create an incredible learning experience.
Through active participation and student collaboration, learning and teaching are more effective.
Old (current): Endless possibilities
Select from an extensive list of pre-made learning flows or create your own. The possibilities are endless!
New: Endless possibilities.
Choose from a large number of pre-made learning processes or create your own. The possibilities are endless!
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
theflow.agency
www.diabeticme.org .. it's something different but I don't find the right words.
https://www.diabeticme.org/
Old (current): Get your Diabetic & Me apparel.
Proud to be a diabetic and proud to wear Diabetic & Me apparel. Get your T-shirt, hoodie or tanktop. For every sale we make, we donate 1 dollar to medical research for diabetes.
New: Get your Diabetic & Me clothing.
Proud to be a diabetic and wear Diabetic & Me costume proudly. Wear a T-shirt, hoodie or vest. For every piece of clothing sold, we donate $1 to medical research on diabetes.
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
Thanks! Sent me a DM with your pricing and I'll see if I can afford it at this moment.
Ok, I just sent you an email.
Thanks!
https://www.yought.com lets give this one a go :D
https://www.yought.com/
Blog
Old (current): Many of my friends have approached me recently with loads of questions around blogging. With the COVID-19 situation, many have been locked down in their home with much more time on their hands.
In my opinion, blogging is much easier to handle than publishing longer-form content like a book.
Even with all the curiosity, the number one reason I see for lack of writing or publishing is fear.
The fear of writing, showing their work to the world, or pressing that publish button.
New: Recently, many of my friends have asked me many questions about blogging. In the face of COVID-19, many people are trapped at home, but they spend more time.
I think blogging is much easier than publishing longer content (such as books).
Even with all curiosity, I think the first reason for lack of writing or publishing is still fear.
Fear of writing, show their work to the world, or press the release button.
Old (current): Survey Tools Are Outdated and Falling Behind
Remove bias and create proper surveys to collect meaningful data. Customize and empower yourself with better forms and surveys.
New: Survey tools are outdated and backward.
Eliminate prejudice and create appropriate surveys to collect meaningful data. Customize and authorize yourself with better forms and questionnaires.
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
Hey no this helps a lot! Interesting how it picks up 'blog' first rather than the home page though.
Cheers :D
Can you provide feedback for zaperp.com :) ?
https://www.zaperp.com/
Old (current): Inventory Management Simplified
Multi-channel inventory with powerful stock management & order fulfillment. Sell & distribute products. Manage entire business and increase your profits.
New: Simplify inventory management.
Multi-channel inventory with powerful inventory management and order fulfillment functions. Sell and distribute products. Manage the entire business and increase profits.
Old (current): Sales
Sell on marketplaces like Amazon or on your own website using Shopify or Woo-commerce. Connect ZapERP with all leading accounting systems including Xero & Quickbooks.
New: Sales
Use Shopify or Woo-commerce to sell in markets like Amazon or on your own website. Connect ZapERP with all leading accounting systems (including Xero and Quickbook).
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
Thank you. :)
This is a very interesting idea!
What are your suggestions for: https://www.userback.io/features
Cheers :)
https://www.userback.io/features
Old (current): Forget managing feedback over email and spreadsheets. Userback has everything your team needs for customer feedback, bug tracking, user acceptance testing and more.
New: Forget management feedback via email and spreadsheet. Userback provides all the information your team needs, including customer feedback, error tracking, user acceptance testing, etc.
Old (current): Easily get visual feedback on any web page
Let your team and clients give you visual feedback directly from your website. They never need to leave the page!
New: Get visual feedback easily on any webpage.
Let your team and customers provide you with visual feedback directly from your website. They never need to leave the page!
Old (current): Get feedback on images, designs and mockups
Easily share images and design concepts with your clients. Complete your projects faster with actionable feedback!
New: Get feedback on images, designs and models
Easily share images and design concepts with your customers. Complete projects faster with actionable feedback!
Old (current): Enhance visual feedback with comments
Reporters can quickly draw and write text directly on your website or image with our modern annotation tool. Works perfectly on screens of all sizes!
New: Enhance visual feedback with comments
Journalists can use our modern annotation tools to quickly draw and write text directly on your website or image. Works perfectly on screens of various sizes!
Old (current): Manage customer feedback in one place
Save time and collect feedback for all your web projects in one place. Create multiple projects and invite clients. Forget managing feedback over email!
New: One-stop management of customer feedback
Save time and gather feedback on all web projects in one place. Create multiple projects and invite customers. Forget to manage feedback via email!
Old (current): Stay organised with notifications
Easily setup notifications to see when customer feedback has been added and updated. Never miss important feedback again!
New: Stay organized through notifications
Easily set up notifications to see when customer feedback has been added and updated. Never miss important feedback again!
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
https://dorik.com
I would love to see some improvement of our copy. 😁
Thanks
https://dorik.io
Old (current): Create & Host Beautiful Single Page Websites Effortlessly
Build beautiful single-page websites without writing any code. Save time and money on building your next website and focus more on what matters to you most.
New: Easily create and host beautiful single-page websites.
No need to write any code to build a beautiful single-page website. Save time and money to build the next website and focus more on the most important things.
Old (current):
Build beautiful websites using our templates for anything including SaaS, Web/Mobile App, Personal & Agency Website. Select your starting template and customize it easily.
New: Use our templates to build beautiful websites, including SaaS, Web/mobile applications, personal and proxy websites. Choose your startup template and easily customize it.
I'm happy to do the full site but unfortunately for the interest of my time, I would have to charge you. Let me know if this helps at all. Or if you would like me to do the full site.
Thank you so much. I appreciate it. I will be in touch when we redo the full site copy.
Hi. I love this idea, and would love to see what you can do with https://enterpagoda.com
https://enterpagoda.com
Front Page
Old (current): Scraping by isn’t good. And debt doesn’t make sense in today’s world.
Invest in yourself instead.
New: Scraping by is not good. In today's world, debt is meaningless. Invest in yourself.
Old (current): Flexible payback
Once you receive money, you have a six month grace period to pay back at no cost. After that, you pay a small monthly amount based on your income, so you only pay what you can afford at any given time.
New: After receiving the payment, you have a six-month grace period to repay it for free.
After that, you will pay a small monthly fee based on your income, so you only have to pay what you can afford at any given time.
Old (current):Life happens. If you aren't in the workforce for any reason, your payments will go on pause.
Payments resume when you're earning above $45,000 per year*.
New: This is life. If you are not at work for some reason, your payment will continue to be suspended.
When your annual income exceeds $45,000 *, the payment will resume.
Old (current): All of the money you pay back goes directly to other people like you who want to invest in themselves or need a financial cushion to get them to their next point in life.
New:All the money you repay goes directly to others like you, who want to invest in themselves or need financial buffers to make them live to the next starting point.
Learn More Page
Old (current): To live well you need to pay for housing, eat well, build skills, get around and take care of yourself.
Historically, to invest in yourself you had to use loans or credit cards that cost a lot - and not just financially.
New: In order to live a good life, you need to pay for housing, diet, skills, travel and taking care of yourself.
Historically, to invest in yourself, you must use expensive loans or credit cards, not just financially.
Old (current): Pagoda gives you peace of mind right now, so you can focus on what’s important.
You’ll receive money for expenses when you need them, have six months instead of a month to pay back at no cost or you only pay what you can afford based on income at any given time.
This gives you breathing room unlike any other option.
New: The pagoda now gives you peace of mind, so you can focus on important things.
You will receive a payment when you need it, and you can repay it for free for six months instead of one month, or you can only pay for what you can afford according to your income at any given time.
Unlike any other option, this gives you breathing space.
Old (current): Around the world, students use what are called Income Share Agreements (ISAs) for tuition to defer payback until they are working and can afford to do so.
We take inspiration from this model, but financial cushions give you peace of mind and cost you less.
New: Worldwide, students use so-called "income sharing agreements" (ISAs) to pay for tuition to delay the return on investment until they work and can afford it.
We get inspiration from this model, but financial buffering can save you peace of mind and reduce costs.
Old (current): With debt, you owe a specific amount back almost immediately or the amount you owe increases.
But not investing in yourself is dangerous when the world needs you at your best today.
Joining Pagoda means investing in yourself without anymore complexity or clouds of debt over your head.
New: With debt, you owe a specific amount almost immediately, or the amount you owe increases.
However, when you are needed most in the world today, it is dangerous to not invest in yourself.
Joining the pagoda means investing in yourself without facing any complexity or debt burden.
Please let me know if this is of any help to you. And would you mind answering the following questions?
Does this make your life better?
Would you pay for a service like this?
Hi!
Wow, thank you so much. This is really helpful -- my life is definitely better now :)
I will use around half of the suggestions you made here.
And I would pay for a service like this.
Cheers!
Hey,
I'm glad that you enjoyed the results. Do you think I could charge monthly on a tool like this, or do you think it would only work with a one-time payment only type deal?
For me, I would be inclined to do a one-time payment, but I can imagine someone else wanting a monthly subscription.
That sounds like a very interesting idea. Do you have any feedback for https://melbado.com/?
https://melbado.com/
1st Page
Old (current): Build a strong,
engaged team
Let teammates appreciate each other and celebrate together.
New: Build powerful
Dedicated team
Let teammates appreciate each other and celebrate together.
Old (current): Live TV Dashboards
Make appreciation visible on internal live TV dashboards to boost motivation.
New: Live TV Dashboard
Appreciation is displayed on the internal live TV dashboard to stimulate motivation.
Old (current): Mobile friendly
Teammates can send a praise directly from their smartphone. Seconds later it is visible in the live dashboard, boosting motivation.
New: Mobile friendly
Teammates can send compliments directly from their smartphones. After a few seconds, it is visible in the real-time dashboard, which inspires motivation.
Please let me know if this is of any help to you. And would you mind answering the following questions?
Does this make your life better?
Would you pay for a service like this?
Thank you! It certainly helps. I think I would pay for this if I had a lot of content. But not to copy paste each proposed sentence, but
as a source of inspiration, or starting point for A/B tests (some value, but depends on the usability of the product and the integrations)
if you have some proof that it improves SEO (super high value, but I guess there is some competition somewhere..)
I'd be curious to see what you could do with https://www.invitation.codes/ :)
https://www.invitation.codes/
1st Page
Old (current): The referral community Invitation is the new social network where everyone get rewarded. Join in, post all your referral links — collect rewards on autopilot.
New: The Referral Community Invitation is a new social network in which everyone can be rewarded. Join and post all your referral links-collect rewards while you're sleeping.
Old (current): Post. Share the referral codes of products you already use and love. It takes 5 minutes to gather them.
New: Post. Referral codes that share products you have used and loved. It takes 5 minutes to collect them.
Old (current): Earn. Get rewarded every time someone uses one of your codes. Everyday thousands of people come here to find invites.
New: Earn. Every time someone uses one of your codes, you will be rewarded. Thousands of people come here every day to find invitations.
Old (current): Grow Explore more referral programs and promote your page to get more bonuses & discounts.
New: Increase. Explore more referral programs and promote your page to get more bonuses and discounts.
Features Page
Old (current): Features. Invitation lets you earn with referral programs. Members promote their referral codes and everyone earn rewards.
New: Members shall promote their referral codes and everyone will therefore earn rewards.
Old (current): List products you already use Take 5 minutes to create your profile and post your links Secure your @username Let any members use your referral links Promote all your referral codes with a single link (your profile) Free forever plan
New: List the products you are already using Take 5 minutes to create your profile and post your links. Secure your @username. Let any member use your referral links Promote all of your referral codes with a single link (profile) Free forever plan
Old (current): Engage with the community Meet your matches: members with similar interests 🔥 no swiping required Exchange referral codes with your friends and followers Discuss referral programs and ways to earn online Meet members who are killing it in the leaderboard Save products and shortlist referral programs that looks promising.
New: Interact with the community to meet your competition conditions: Members with similar interests 🔥 No need to swipe to exchange recommendation codes with your friends and followers Recommended procedures for desired products and candidate lists.
Old (current): Discover cool new products Reap the signup bonuses before everyone Search, browse categories and get personalized recommendations. Compare the best programs and avoid traps and scams. Get the latest deals when they come out. Don't miss the train on the next airbnb and online bank.
New: Discover great new products and get a registration bonus before everyone searches, browses categories and gets personalized recommendations. Compare the best procedures to avoid pitfalls and scams. Get the latest transaction. Don't miss the next Airbnb and online banking train.
Old (current): Grow your empire Track traffic and clicks on all your links Grow your followers to get more visibility Repost your favorite codes Personalize and promote your profile Add widgets to your website Complete challenges to unlock premium features. Establish your domination by climbing in the leaderboard
New: Development empire
Track traffic and click all links
Increase your followers to gain more visibility
Repost your favorite code
Personalize and promote your profile
Add widgets to your website
Complete challenges to unlock advanced features.
Build your own dominance by boarding the leaderboard
Old (current): Why don't you post your links here too? List the products you love. Get rewarded. It's quick & free.
New: Why don't you post a link here? List your favorite products. Earn rewards. Fast and free.
Please let me know if this is of any help to you. And would you mind answering the following questions.
Does this make your life better?
Would you pay for a service like this?
Thanks! There is some good bits there!
The bot creates too many typos & weird sentences to be usable directly. Headings should be parsed as a different sentence.
You could maybe market it to agencies to help them iterate more quickly, but it's not a usable alternative to usual copywriting process imho.
Yeah, the bot came out with weird sentences because your site is filled with typos & weird sentences to start out.
Interesting project!
Any feedback on my book page? https://adhdpro.xyz/
https://adhdpro.xyz/
Header
Old (current): You are someone with big goals, but you keep missing them. You feel broken, lazy, or stupid. You think you will never accomplish any of your goals.
Perhaps you even concluded that you will never accomplish anything! Or perhaps others told you to "settle down". Fuck that!
You are none of these things. You CAN accomplish goals! You just need to prepare better. You need to use your brain properly.
You need a system.
After countless interviews, books, lessons, and conversations, it's clear that the most important project you can take on is to build this system for yourself.
New: You 're a person with ambitious goals, but you always miss them. You 're going to feel depressed, lazy or stupid. You don't think you'll ever achieve any goals. You might even have concluded that you're never going to be able to accomplish anything! Maybe someone else is telling you to "settle." Fuck That! You can accomplish your goals! You just need to be prepared for that. You need to use your brain properly.
You need to have a system.
After various interviews, books, lessons, and dialogue, it's clear that the most important project you can do is build this system for yourself.
Heading 1
Old (current): I have heard this so many times. Different advisors, books, and other resources all tell you to ignore this feeling or to avoid it.
Now don't get me wrong, ADHD is not a "superpower". It's a brain disorder. It has positive and negative side effects. But instead of hiding away and numbing yourself, build a system to take advantage of your highly motivated manic moments while keeping yourself sane and happy.
Don't ignore the unique way your brain is wired. Use it. Build a system around it. Learn to enjoy the benefits of your curious mind.
New: I have heard it many times. Different consultants, books and other resources will tell you to ignore or avoid this feeling.
Now please don't get me wrong, ADHD is not a "superpower". This is a brain disease. It has pleasant and unpleasant side effects. However, don't disguise yourself and your feelings of numbness, but build a system to take full advantage of your proactive manic moments while maintaining good health.
Don't ignore the unique way the brain connects. Use it. Build a system around it. Learn to enjoy the benefits of curiosity.
Heading 2
Old (current): Implement the right processes in your life.
This is the book I wish I had with me when I was 20 years old and struggling to study, getting frustrated, and feeling like an imposter. I wasn't an imposter, and neither are you.
Sign up for the email list below and I'll send you sample chapters as I complete them.
This book will be released in July 2020.
New: Perform the correct procedures in your life.
I hope this book was brought to me when I was 20. I study hard, feel depressed and feel like an impostor. I am not an impostor, nor are you.
Sign up for the email list below, and when I complete these chapters, I will send you sample chapters.
This book will be published in July 2020.
Please let me know if that helps and that I didn't miss anything. I would really appreciate any other feedback you have at all.
I can't wait to get my hands on your book. It sounds like a great read!
Wow this is really great feedback. Tremendously helpful. Thank you so much!