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Is my offer clear?

Hi!

I recently finished building the landing page for a new productized service I am offering.

https://www.outslide.co/

Is my proposition value clear and catchy enough? Anything else I can work on to improve the page in general? Any comment would be highly appreciated!

on November 30, 2019
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    Yeah. Great idea too.

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    I think I would switch out either "Custom presentation design for $49 only." or "No matter how long your presentation is, we charge the same price" with a sentence along the lines of "We take your presentations and make them pop, in 24 hours, for a flat $49". Didn't give that much thought, but I thought it was a little odd that I had to wait until I got to the three set section until I knew the flow of things.

    Over all though looks great!

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    Hey, your content is clear to me. 24 hours sounds like a very quick turnaround for unlimited slides, it might worry me that if I provided a long presentation that the quality might suffer. Perhaps pricing and response time could be tiered dependent on the number of pages and then it would seem more realistic/that you'll be able to do a quality job in the time given.

    Also the *14-Day Money Back Gaurantee I'd expect to have further info, given the * - but couldn't see any.

    Hope that's helpful and good luck!

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    Maybe a few examples slides would sell it better

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    Hey Momen,

    Great job. I really like the landing page. The offer is clear.

    There's one thing I would change, though. Often times with landing pages, businesses will present the service/product features as the value proposition. While that's not wrong, you should take some time to dig into the prospects pain-points and how your product will make them feel better. Then, once you have them hooked emotionally, you can talk about the more logical benefits: like features.

    Hope that helps.

    -John

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      Thanks for the feedback John! I'll take that into consideration.

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    Offer is clear.

    I would look at https://sumit.versoly.com/ for a template for the site.

    Customers might not be ready to convert so offering them something like a PDF, template etc will increase conversions later on.

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      Thanks! I will have a look at it.

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    What youre selling is clear but I did wonder if changes/reiterations are allowed within the single payment?

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      Yes, unlimited revisions are included in the offer ☺️

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        That's a big factor I think, maybe you should add a simple FAQ section for things like this?

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          I agree. A FAQ page will be of great help for customers. Thanks for the feedback!

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    Just a heads up that the headline is not displaying correctly on Firefox Mac: https://i.imgur.com/PufxcDv.png

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      Hope it's fixed now.

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        Looks good here

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    The landing page looks great. couple of things I noticed.

    You say you are an expert. prove it. With samples, past clients, testimonials etc..
    Spell out what's included in your offer. What happens you misread my slides and I don't like your designs? How much is revisions? By the way, great offer. I might want to use your services for a demo deck.

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      Thanks for the feedback! You’re right, the website lacks necessary details about the offer that customers might want to know before paying. I’ll make sure I address any possible concerns and add more presentation samples.

      We’ll be glad to work on your demo deck! 😁

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    offer is clear. just maybe one thing to add as a feedback: is it really "No matter how long your presentation is, we charge the same price" ?

    I do have a couple of 100-240 (sick!) slides company powerpoint presentations in the worst designed form imaginable. What would happen if I'd upload that as a single powerpoint with 1500 slides+? Do I really just have to pay $49? After browsing your landingpage, my expectations are pretty high in getting a slickly designed custom powerpoint back ... ;)

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      Hi David! Thanks for checking out the website ☺️ 1500+ slides is a very unreasonable size for a presentation delivered to an audience, so we won't accept projects of such magnitude. A presentation of 200ish slides is manageable and the offer will still apply!

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        Thanks for the suggestion Alex! I totally agree about adding more example presentations. The Before/After slider only allowed for one set to be uploaded. I'll probably add an 'examples' page to the site.

        The talk you gave looks interesting! 😁