Is this overkill?
https://industrialmana.com/
Hi everyone,
I'm still trying to figure out if people would want what I'm building. After mixed/negative results from the first iteration, I did a complete rebrand.
However, I feel like I went too far on the design part and left out a lot of information on the landing page. What do you think?
#landing-page-feedback
I think this is a really interesting idea but I would love more detail on how the model works. It seems like there's a gap between "1. Run your app" ... "3. We remove CO2". Why do you need me to run an app to remove CO2? How does my little app generate CO2 anyway?
To me this landing page is pitching me on a problem that I don't yet understand. I would refocus to clearly stating the problem: "Did you know that your app generates CO2? Industrial Mana makes you carbon negative." And back it up with data as to why my app is actually contributing to global warming and how you're helping me be more responsible.
The design looks fine to me. It's not 100% polished but I would focus on the content instead.
Good luck!
Hey there! You're absolutely right that the copy needs work.
I updated the content, with the homepage focusing on the technology and moved the app stuff to a separate product page.
(https://industrialmana.com/)
In terms of conversion, it should be good start with well conversion since your message is clear. A visitor can get the message in less than 30 seconds. But in terms of design, I suggest to spend more time on it. Use a short and clear title for pricing and beta access sections. Have some kind of dividers in between sections so the visitors can understand the difference. In beta access, add some vertical spacing to your form.
Thanks for the feedback! I added some dividers, changed the titles, and added spacing to the form. I also added a separate page explaining the technology more. (https://industrialmana.com/)
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