Iterated landing page - Looking for feedback

Thanks for the feedback - really appreciated.

It's pretty clear that we're not doing a good enough job at describing how it actually works.

Here's what it does:

• You define your target market, problem you solve for them, and number of people you want to test the idea with (lets say for this example you chose 50)
• We then build a list of 50 people on LinkedIn who represent your target market
• You then connect your own LinkedIn account, and using that, we automatically send those 50 people connection requests, and - if they connect - send a message asking if the problem you're looking to solve resonates or not

This gives you:

• An indication of whether your target market actually experiences the problem you're looking to solve
• A direct connection with potential early adopters (i.e. those who reply 'yes, this is a problem')

Does that make sense?

I'm just working on a new format of landing page anyway. Pretty clear from your feedback (and feedback from a few others) that it's not quite doing the job.