LP Roast for Newsletter - Would You Subscribe?
Hey guys!
After reading a lot of posts on how to craft a good landing page, I tried to incorporate as much of what I've learned into building the one below last weekend. It's marketing a health / fitness / biohacking newsletter I am starting:
I tried to
- highlight the value ppl get (title)
- explain how they will get it & highlight pain point they solve with it (subtitle)
- had no convincing social proof I could think of (since I am just starting out), so I decided to have fun with it.
Page looks fairly different on mobile vs laptop due to visuals.
What I think, but am not quite sure, is lacking:
- good visual (but will only appear on laptop properly?)
- copy seems long but have no clue what to cut
Please give me a good roast and list all the things that are horribly wrong (bc I am sure there are many, this is the first LP I ever built).
Congrats! I like the idea and would subscribe!
I've added some suggestions here - https://visualdebug.com/show/thearete.co
Thanks so much for the feedback Stan!
Will work on some example content right away and link it.
Do you have any idea on how to add social proof without any pre-existing audience / users? I was struggling quite a bit with this.
Friends and family - that's where I would start. :)