Roast it hard and I will roast yours!

Hi, delete this movie please. You cannot do a b2b business with that movie, when people see only one word per second, which, I think, is useless, looks like a pitch from bad salesman) Stop writing this words like- innovative and amazing everywhere. Fix your wording «either.Because” or better make it short. And still...not easy to get the full VP even in 30 secs. Sorry for that way of roasting) PS I don't have a landing page)

Hey Sarah, I recorded my first impressions of RecurringX... hope it's useful for you, best of luck and shout if you'd like any more feedback! https://www.loom.com/share/202f7fb153e0485fa7e398dbfb8d48d3

• I watched the video and it looks more like a trailer for a movie, I personally think it is disturbing and it would be better to make a whiteboard style of video.
• Video should finish on your chosen frame, it should not proceed to selection of another youtube video.
• There is a lot of empty space on mobile resolution.
• Headline is almost invisible and the two column layout makes a ton of unused space.
• I would break huge paragraphs to several small ones, it is easier to consume by the reader.

Just my $.02, I hope it helps. You can roast mine https://webstoreinsight.com/

Now a these days, designs have to be up to a certain standard.

Landing page is minimalistic and I like that

CTA is great on your landing page

So, correct me if I am wrong, clients can sell their own SaaS products by white labeling to their customers?

https://www.yirla.com

It is good. I liked the clear CTA - Email with Get invited.

I saw the 25 second video and had to scroll to read the copy.

Unfortunately I dont understand what I am looking at or what you do.

I think there is a need to make a simple positioning statement with "We do this for these people with this problem".

If I have to scroll to get that then I think you might want to move that up.

All of the feedback here is awesome. If you're looking for some more, feel free to join my Facebook group. We are trying to get a lot of good input for landing pages like yours in the community :) https://www.facebook.com/groups/lpsfosaas/

Hi Sarah,

positive:

• overall design, theme and colors
• clear CTA (Sign up with e-mail)
• Value propostion isn't bad

negative:

• too many e-mail CTA's. one above the fold and one at the bottom are enough for my taste.
• make use of white space
• way too much copy
• I think that the video didn't add any value
• who is your target audience? --> above the fold

It would be great if you roast our website. Especially our pricing page. https://timebuzzer.com/

Hi Sarah! The landing page's is looking pretty good!

Here's my feedback:

• typo: "dozens of amazing White-Lable SaaS products"
• I didn't really understand what the service did till I read the little blurb that had the typo, so maybe it worked but maybe make the first bold text more direct?
• minor: the first wave page separator background gets pixelated and blurry on desktop, perhaps use an SVG
• I liked how the video hyped up the product, but I still didn't understand what the product was from watching it
• grammar and writing: "But I get…Most of the SaaS companies don’t give you the option to offer their"
• ^ the blurb above was just too much too read, you need to break down how you offer value right away, or the steps on how to get up and running
• I liked this section a lot: "The incredible benefits of our service", but I feel like the tiles had way too much text that I skipped reading some of them
• the FAQ section is a nice touch but there are too many questions, focus on the most important for the customer. The refund section IMO should be under the hidden fees, seeing a FAQs about refunds right off the bat tarnishes the brand value; maybe the wording is off and should say "do you offer trial periods" instead of "refunds"

Here's mine to roast: https://crowdparty.app/

• The video is not helping, i looked at the video way before i looked at your email capture box and it doesn't add value, should be way lower on the page.
• "Don’t you wish to grow your business and make your clients happier than ever?" Too wordy, can be shorted to "Your clients will thank you".
• Too much going on text wise in a compact area imo. Either make the page longer or shorten the text.
• "What Client says about us" -----> Should be changed.
• Paragraphs should be broken up, it looks daunting to read.

Great job otherwise, i love the design.

Hit me with your best shot: StockAlarm.io

• Way, way too much text on the landing page
• the header doesn't capture my attention. It doesn't sound natural. and it's too long, with many consecutive adjectives "Subscription based White-Label SaaS Products"
• I felt like the video was too much in my face with the auto-play as soon as I landed, plus a bit overwhelming with the amount of text next to it. It just felt like too much was going on.

The CTA "Get Invited" box appears 4 times! I don't feel it is necessary, looks kinda of desperate. Why not using a floating box that keeps on the screen (css equivalent of position:fixed) as you pass by the first one?
I would also suggest to not use youtube as video provider (if you are not going to promote the Youtube channel), as it show the related videos at the end, which may show some distracting thumbnails or even competitors.

Slow/takes forever to load, make your header longer, too basic.

I'd build a new landing page if I were you, versoly.com might help :)

Hi Sarah, here is my opinion. Too much text everywhere! You need to keep each bucket with 3 lines maximum. Also, move the testimonials up if you can, I believe a lot of people takes them into consideration :)
I'll only ask you to sign upPeerPull and join a room with us :)

there's may too much going on, the video is actually good but why not just make a explanation video and remove all the other pitches, from the site. showcase the potential products and services. mine is opsdeveloper.io

Hi Sarah,

• Your hero subheading misspells 'White-Label' as 'White-Lable'
• Each section feels very text heavy and every text blocks feels very buzzword heavy
• Even your thank-you page after signing up has waaay too much text - always think signal vs noise
• In many places, you miss out a space after a period.. e.g. "subscription-based model.And it’s not like you"
• The video feel like a rip-off of an WWDC Apple interstitial - I can't find exactly which one but it was something like 'Shot on iPhone' promo

The number one question I have while I was initially looking through the page is "what sass product am I reselling?"

I would make it clearer about what service it is that the end user will resell

1. The alignment of the main heading/subheading and video feel off. They should both be vertically centered on top of that first blue backdrop. Right now they are top-aligned, so it looks unusual IMO.

2. Your main CTA, the email and "Get Invited" button, are blocked by my AdBlocker (uBlock).

3. Your copy is generally too wordy. I would reduce it and break it into paragraphs where possible.

My site: https://quickchart.io

Hey @RecurringX

I like

• Great color contrast
• Nice and bold headlines as well as other titles

I don't like

• Body text is too heavy, don't think I'd read
• Choice of illustration seems mismatch the brand

I'm in the middle of build Virtual Mojito 2.0, a lot of ideas are already in place but yet to build. I'd love to hear your feedback on my Version 1.0

Cheers!

Hi! I like the video, but unfortunately it doesn't explain what it does, or how it works. It's just a cool fast paced video that may work very well as an intro for an Ad campaign.

My suggestion is to add a demo with a voice over on it. If you don't have video editing skills you can just create a loom.com.

I also think the idea has a a lot of potential, but it would help to understand which are the products that people will be able to offer.

As it is now, it's hard to: 1) Undersatnd what you do. 2) Understand the products available. 3) Understand the value. Copy needs work.

Overall design looks great!

Hello Sarah !

On the content
-Honestly I didn't understand well 😅but I might not be the target...

Things you can do to improve the design :
-Less texts in the paragraphs (I would cut by 50%)
-Reading only titles should make sense
-Use left align for your h1 (if you keep the 2 col layout),
-Use svg everywhere you can (the logo is appearing blurry for on my retina screen)
-Bold h3 to enhance contrast
-Use the same border radius on buttons and on text inputs
-Use a lighter grey for the email input

My landing page (actually for a client)
Ready for a roast :)

https://loancover.io/

Hi,

Looks a bit confusing to me
Not a fan of the video playing automatically with sound (personal opinion)
The first block is grey text on white background ..hard to read
Some white spaces that can be reduced?
There is a lot to read (ok i'm a lazy guy) ^^
Not sure I understand what it is about, but I'm probably not your target
Pictures are missing in the bottom slider

Not a specialist at all so don't take this a granted :)

My page is https://cloudbuddies.io (still WIP)

Hey Sarah,

When I loaded your page, it was blank, in the top left section and looked almost broken. Here is how I saw it: https://prnt.sc/u9h1c3

Some other thoughts:

1. I watched the video, but didn't quite understand what your product is. Something to do with building a SaaS.

2. Once I highlighted the title and was able to see it, I saw "
   Upsell Your Services with Hottest Subscription based White-Label SaaS Products"

Reading this line-- I am still a bit lost as to what it is that you are offering. It just feels like a mouthful of words that seem like they say something but are ultimately lost on me. It sounds like there are some white label saas product collection(s) that I can pitch to client as my own? Not really clear.

3. "Be the first to get invited when the app gets" -- so now it sounds like it's an app or some sort? Is it a marketing app? I am not entirely sure. The last word in that sentence seems out of place.

4. Once I get to the "Marketplace" headline, it starts to be a bit more clear, but reading the text below I'm still confused. What exactly is this and how does it work? Would my clients be saving money by paying once.. for what? What is my role in this as a consultant? Sorry, but unclear.

5. I see a bunch of fluff words like "innovating solutions" which doesn't inspire any confidence in this being something that's for me.

6. Then we get to the headline of ".. benefits of our services" and now it sounds like a service. Even more confused.

7. The entire page feels very wordy. Very few to no visuals and the testimonial images are broken. I do consulting work and this might be something I'd be interested in IF I understood what it is. But if I may be super honest, I would leave this page on loading. Mostly because I expect a very high quality landing page / product in the marketing / SaaS space and unless I saw clear value from your product within 10 seconds or so, I'd just close the window.

Lastly, I feel like this is probably something cool. Reading between the lines makes it sound like this is a new approach to selling SaaS products to clients, but the details of what this is / how it works are sparse. Maybe the features section explains it but it's hard to read with current formatting... just does not give me the motivation to figure out what this is.

I hope this was a bit helpful!

Here is my product if you want to give it your meanest criticism ;) https://www.swipe.page/?dc=ih

Cheers,
Gene

Hey love the video - what did you use to make it? Only criticsm of it would be to maybe show some screen shots in the actual video itself as at the moment it's harder to tell from that video what it does. I only say that because usually when I see a video I'll watch that before reading anything else. I could be the only one so obviously try and see if any one else has the same feedback.

Also FYI I can't comment on the copy or anything because this is all I see when I visit (Chrome latest mac)

https://imgur.com/a/URgtLJl

Never a big fan of autoplay videos, especially ones that blow my speakers off my desk.

Colors Good, I like the undraw like artwork, same but different enough.

The logo has a lot going on, need margin between the logo and the tag line

The tag line is a bit long, perhaps simplify from 10 words to 6.

Lot of text without proper spacing in the middle of the page.

The under the fold looks better then the above the fold, i like the 6 grid like points.

roast me along with 1 positive comment : https://www.sinosend.com

Is there no background?
The text above the get invited email box is hardly readable for me? (I might have bad eye sight haha)

I personally hate it when video's with sound auto play...

Images don't seem to load?

this "Don’t you wish to grow your business and make your clients happier than ever?" section seems to have a super long paragraph, can you cut it down in half?

I've scrolled like 20% and seen 3 times the same signup, maybe a bit much?

That purple block is really cool, but I would round every corner

from there downwards is actually very nice, the faq and tesimonials.

Roast me if you can please: https://daily-dev-tips.com/

What I see now there are a lot of empty spaces in the page. There is no graphic, sounds like you accommodated for graphic but there is no.
Your headline is not that clear, it is wordy - might need to shorten that also might need to use larger font to make it more visible.
Hope it helps.