Roast My Landing Page

Hi,

I’m specialized in CRO (Conversion Rate Optimization), which is the art of improving conversions on the web.

Right now, I’m offering completely free support for landing pages. Basically, I’ll audit your landing page and give you clear recommendations, both short- and long-term, to help boost your conversions, all based on research and proven methods.

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1. you apply my recommendations,
2. you give me feedback,
3. you leave a review if you think it deserves it,
4. your page has more than 4,000 visitors per month.

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It looks great... for an established CRM. If you're new, how do you have clients and numbers? Your headline and subhead seem pretty generic. Why would some business sign up for this all in one solution they've never heard of, when there are plenty of those out there that are more well known?

Maybe I'm misunderstanding? Is this a new design for an already established CRM? If this is a new design for the scaleupforce that shows up in google, then it is a definite step up. Nevertheless, still not clear what makes it different.

I don't think we need the entire menu on the landing page, can have signup/login and your logo.

The copy is fairly generic, did you design a specific UPC, a specific niche target group?...

The image on the video seems like just another bulky CRM...

This feels like a huge projects not an indie hack, the website screams big enterprise and not inviting so self onboard

IDK what your goals...