Roast my landing page, and I'll return the favor and optimize your landing page for Free

Hi mate.

I would work on the font size/width on your H1 so that it doesn't wrap so awkwardly (page on its own line). Also, your page is awkwardly just higher than 100vh. Might wanna tweak that!

The main issue I have is that I have no idea what your product actually is. I personally think that the feature vs. benefit discussion around landing pages in our community has been fairly misguided.

For a lot of products, particularly those targeting more technical users, understanding what the product is and its features is far more important; as we intrinsically understand the related benefits. On your page you've done a great job of outlining the benefits, but without understanding the "what" and "how", I have no desire to move forward.

Here's the new landing page I'm designing, would love your thoughts: https://www.figma.com/proto/suNbI3t4LqFfOY5WXYZURo/Self-Service-Landing-Page?node-id=29%3A243&scaling=min-zoom&page-id=0%3A1

This is a great idea. We actually are struggling with our landing page design and would be willing to pay for a service like this.

Your current landing looks nice, but I just cannot assess the credibility. Have you helped 20 websites before? Any social proof?

Also on mobile, there is a menu button on the top right. After clicking it, I don't see anything in the menu. Then if I close the menu, the whole page is shifted right, which is ugly.

Would like you feedback on our landing page. Thank you!
https://sanderling.app/

I’ll make more space to make words more readable. It’s a bit condensed
On mobile I have a Google menu bar with nothing in it. I’ll remove it.

Here is mine - https://subma.io

Here you go:

• sub header is too long
• After reading both header and subheader, I wasn't sure what exactly is this about. Is it a manual review service or something automatic (AI anyone?) that runs and gives me advice?
• I would try to shorten subheader to something like: Convert more customers without extra work, based on best practices collected from top-performing competitors.
• My service happens to be on the forms business, so I know a thing or two about form optimization:
  • Less fields convert better. Much better. If you can drop the name you'll get more submissions.
  • You don't have labels above the fields. Once I start typing I no longer know if I put my URL in the right place.
  • Submit button should state a clear call to action, not "submit". Something like "Get your report" or "Start converting more"
  • Label for email field - you don't need "please". You can try something like "To which email you'd like to get the report sent?" or "Email where you'd like to get the report"
  • Text above the form is too long. Try something like "First report is on us! Get yours within 1-2 days"
• I'm missing some credibility. There's nothing about you and no social proof. How would I know that you're capable of helping me convert better? Adding couple of testimonials will make a huge difference. Also "about me" that will tell me about your experience.

That's it. Good luck!

My site is form-data.com.
Main competitors are formspree.io, formstack.com, and there are many more.

Really like the colors and design :) Here’s my feedback on copy:

• The headline is very clear, but might feel a bit more exciting by adding an adjective or time container. (E.g., Increase conversions FAST on your SAAS landing page)

• Your subhead copy feels more like a paragraph and might be better if it was scannable and a quicker read

• And the final line of your subhead might be more enticing if it read “Let us do the hard work of converting your customers.”

• The form copy might convert better if it was more concise and the word “FREE” is highlighted more. That gets a bit lost due to the amount of copy.

Hope that helps! Here’s my landing page :) https://LearnStash.com

Hello, I love the idea of your value proposition, although I feel that the landing page lacks communicating the confidence that it should convey to decide on your services.

The form can be greatly improved. I would do the following:

• I would take advantage of that prominent space for a good illustration or video.
• In exchange for the form I would add a button with a very clear and direct CTA to the service.
• This button opens an "onboarding" form to make you feel more accompanied and to show that quality work is coming for the client.

I have an example of a site that I really like for its communication structure and it does exactly the same thing you do: https://www.sumithegde.com/

I hope these comments can be useful to you.

I would like to share my website to analyze: https://gorillacms.com/ (At the moment it is in Spanish, but you can translate with Google and it will work perfectly.)

I have a startup of UX design and custom programming services here in case you also want to analyze it hehe: https://gorillasite.tech/en

Thanks!

PS: sorry for my little English, I have a native Spanish language.

Seeing a form makes me run away, unless I first see something that wants me to fill in the form.
If I were you, I would have one line of header, and no sub-header. I would push down the form and use the location for an animated image. For instance, you can show several screenshots of Google Analytics' conversion page.

I personally also don't much trust websites that don't have a pricing page, or at least some clarifications about it.

I would also advise you to get the consent of those that you review, so that you can add their logos on your landing page as proof.

If you'd like to review my page, please do so: klaque.com
It's in Portuguese but Chrome's translate should do. I'm not looking for increased conversion, since I am not selling anything. If you have ideas to make the website clearer or more appealing I would very much appreciate.

This seems like a promising idea. However, maybe I'm missing something, but I'm only seeing about 40 words of text on the landing page ("INCREASE CONVERSIONS ... extra work"), which doesn't seem like enough to make a persuasive case for your offering. The ~40 words state pretty clearly what the service aims to accomplish, but those assertions appear to be floating in a sort of informational vacuum with little to support, explain or illustrate them.

Also, the landing page doesn't make clear what distinguishes this service from any number of other similar ones -- perhaps it's the part about "best practices", but the phrasing there seems vague.

Lastly, I'm getting a blank gray rectangle when I click on the hamburger menu icon (using Chrome in Windows).

Hope you have success with this.

Hi ! Sorry for my silly question but can you tell me what does "roasting" a landing page mean?