Roast my Landing Page
https://tabitha-demo-2-dfwmbd.vertex360.co
A client of mine offers dance lessons and choreography services, for which I have recently made her landing page. I'm turning to the indiehackers community to give me some useful, honest feedback. Please let me know what you think!
$100 PER ROUTINE etc. must be clickable!
overused design
Where are you lunching it???
pretty nice overall, some things I noticed
I found a small bug: clicking the "Rates and Packages" doesn't smooth scroll to the section and I agree the CTAs could be a bit bigger.
Other than that it looks clean and simple 👌
I like it!
I think the calls to action should be bigger everywhere though.
https://ibb.co/DbsyLrR
https://ibb.co/4YdcfzB
Also, as mentioned elsewhere, I expected the '$100 per routine' text to be buttons.
When they weren't had to look around to figure out what I was supposed to click.
Great job though!
Thanks, it seems like you're not the only person who expected the prices to be buttons. Maybe this would be a smart edit to make. Do you think these buttons should navigate the user to a separate page that contains a more detailed price description?
That would be nice, but until that page is built you could navigate to the contact form at the bottom?
The confusion for me was that they look like the buttons but don't act the same way, so as long as they do something I think you're ok.
On a mobile the menu doesn't close after navigation so unless you notice the content changing you wouldn't know it has worked.
The hamburger menu icon blurs into the hero image a little so may be a little harder to spot.
Not perfect but far from bad PageSpeed results https://developers.google.com/speed/pagespeed/insights/?url=https%3A%2F%2Ftabitha-demo-2-dfwmbd.vertex360.co%2F&tab=mobile
There are a few other tests I commonly run on my clients sites, I will do these shortly for you.
Thank you so much, this is great information.
I like the page.
Runs smooth.
Navigation is easy.
For me the menu was too small.
Same with the pricing. Small prices mean for me that you try to hide them. Bigger ones are perceived more like an advertisement.
The filter of the first picture is missed in the other ones. I was a bit disoriented to see kind of "clear" pictures.
Overall really good!
Some points:
The Get To Know Tabitha copy is far too much. My eyes immediately skip over it. I'd probably lead with an interesting headline that makes me want to get to know Tabitha, rather than just the header "Get To Know Tabitha".
Add padding to your anchor divs, because the anchor links cut off too sharp on the top of the header for the div.
Overall, my general criticism is that I want the page to tell me more about Tabitha and her personality, without condensing that into its own giant paragraph. There's really no personality or story told throughout the UI - it feels like more of a business entity landing page rather than that for a specific person.
This is very helpful, thank you. Do you think it would be more readable/less of an eye sore if the "get to know Tabitha" section was divided into separate paragraphs, or should I just eliminate some of the text altogether to make it a shorter description?
I definitely think breaking it up into separate paragraphs would help, using story telling headers to create a narrative on page before diving into the details below :)
The menu doesn't fix on mobile? Tested on 360px by 517px
Looks great! Only thing I will mention is the social links at the bottom of the page aren't currently linking to Tabitha's accounts ☺️
Thank you! There are a few incomplete items – you'll notice that I also haven't posted any blogs and they are currently just default photos. I just wanted to get some overall feedback on the current state of it. Thank's for the positive feedback!