Roast my landing page

I found it quite compelling. Despite being text heavy, I easily found my way to the bottom.

For what it’s worth, three nitpicking typos:

• “Imagine if your mom had \ access to your workstation. \ Won't you be getting bite-sized apples shoved in your mouth every two hours?” (The “Won’t” should be “Wouldn’t".
• “The fruits arrive your reception…” should be “arrive at your”.
• “Dont feel we can help you develop a habit.” “Dont” should be “Don’t” and, generally, I didn't quite understand the intent of “Dont feel we can help you develop a habit.” (Perhaps you meant to end with a comma, to connect the following sentence about cancelling anytime.)

You might want to check the button at the bottom. I can DM a screenshot if you want.

I'd also love your opinion about a landing page we built: https://www.unimind.team/

It's important to make sure that your landing page is visually appealing and easy to navigate.

One way to make your landing page stand out is to add visuals, such as images or videos, that draw the user's attention. But of course the photo/video must let users know what your service or product does, so don't be too generic. You can also use different font sizes, colors, and styles to highlight important information and make it easier to read.

In terms of the text on your landing page, it's generally best to avoid centering long blocks of text, as this can make it difficult for users to read. Instead, consider using left-aligned or justified text, and break up long blocks of text into smaller, more manageable chunks. This will make your landing page easier to read and more user-friendly.

Overall, the key is to create a landing page that is visually appealing, easy to navigate, and clearly conveys the information that you want to share with your audience. By making these changes, you can improve the effectiveness of your landing page and encourage more users to contact you for further tips.

I hope that these tips will be useful for you and wish you good luck in improving your landing page!

I would change the main photo for something that really represents "fruit delivered to your office" maybe an illustration-style image will fit. And also would make the logo bigger to catch the attention. The copy is ok for the first -stage but maybe later needs some improvement. Good luck!

Firstly, the image looks generic and out of place in your header.

1. I suggest going into canva, grabbing a few fruit icons from flaticon, and then piecing together a design.

As an example, you can take a look at my pre-launch website I posted about in my twitter: https://twitter.com/TheRealEtch/status/1601405291723395073

The cloud was from flaticon, the little tentacles at the bottom were made by me in canva, and the logo was obviously put there by me as well.

The icon design vs the stock image also matches your logo better, which is a basket of cartoon fruit.

2. Not website related, but you should have the option to deliver fresh vegetables as well. Those are also quite important for a healthy diet, and is probably what your customers imagine is healthy as well.

3. You should really have a few images of what the servings look like. I don't see any on the page. If I was a potential customer, I would get suspicious right away.

You have the opportunity to show off your product in the header, and all I get is a stock image? I would start wondering if they delivered barely any fruit, or if it was low quality, and would likely not sign up, or at least wait to see what others rate the company before signing up and forgetting about it later.

4. State what the customers will get in their fruit package. How much fruit, what type of fruit, do they have options of choosing, etc. This is especially important if some people have allergies.

I see a lot of marketing copy on the landing page, but not nearly enough describing the product in more detail.

This is just a landing page, so I would imagine you'd get more of this stuff hammered out in the future, but there's small things too like having a logo in your favicon.

Speaking of roasting, as mentioned before, my landing page is also going up soon, and I'd love to get some feedback from you if you have the time. I posted my twitter here already, so you can follow to stay tuned for any landing page posts.

Good luck on your product!