Show IH: Any feedback on my landing Page.
Hi all, Longtime lurker. Finally have enough courage to post. Anyway this is something I've working on on the side. It's an online appointment scheduler for business in the service space. I just put up a landing page with a demo, while I finish working on the back-end and some more features. Any feedback will be greatly appreciated .
Thanks
I would recommend simplifying your description and adding a features list down below. It feels like you are trying to explain everything your product does in one go. It would help to have a bare-bones description of what the product is, and a section that goes into more depth.
Thanks for the feedback. I will work on that.
After reading it an clicking through the demo I figured out that it's a way to set up appointments with your customers. But that's not clear from your description. The second sentence of your body copy – "... your customer's schedule's online booking's..." seems particularly awkward.
Also note: "appointments" and "bookings" don't use an apostrophe.
Thanks. I will make those corrections.