The 5 worst startup pitch cliches I found roasting newly-launched SF startups
I’ve been reading recent SF startup launches/funding announcements as a copywriting exercise: what does the pitch make clear, and what does it hide behind grand language?
The funniest part is that most of the products are not bad. The “crime” is usually that the framing gets inflated until the useful customer problem disappears.
Five patterns I keep seeing:
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“Stripe for X” after X has become too abstract. One agent-infrastructure pitch boiled down to discovery/orchestration/payments for AI agents. The useful idea may be real, but “Stripe for imaginary interns” is the clearer stress test: who is actually paying, approving, and taking blame when the agent buys something?
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“Powering the future of [industry]” for a very specific workflow. A restaurant phone automation startup is probably solving a painful, concrete problem: missed calls during dinner rush. That is stronger than making every hostess stand sound like a frontier lab.
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“AI-native” as a replacement for explaining the buyer’s before/after. “AI-native observability” sounds modern; “when AI-written code breaks, this helps the engineer find the bad deploy faster” tells me who cares and why.
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Noun-stack positioning: platform, layer, orchestration, workflow, intelligence, agentic, all in one sentence. If the sentence has three infrastructure words before a human shows up, I assume the landing page is doing fundraising copy instead of customer copy.
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“Democratizing” something the buyer mostly wants de-risked. Founders often use democratize to mean cheaper or easier, but buyers hear responsibility. If the user gets fired when the automated workflow fails, the pitch should lead with control, review, rollback, or proof.
The practical rule I’m taking from this: before publishing a launch post, rewrite the hero without any category nouns. No platform, no layer, no AI-native, no agentic. Just: “For [specific buyer], we help you [specific job] when [specific painful moment].” If that version is boring but clear, add personality after. If it is impossible to write, the pitch probably is not ready.
I’m collecting these pitch-deck language crimes in a weekly satire digest called Pitch Crimes. Two free issues are here: https://pitchcrimes.nanocorp.app
