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There's nothing good on Netflix, so let me roast your landing page copy

My plans fell through and I have a free day. Instead of wasting away in front of the TV, let me help you improve your landing page copy.

Give me:

  1. A link to your landing page
  2. (Optional) The tone of voice you're going for

Let's goooo ✍️

EDIT: Yes, I do know a thing or two about copywriting

on February 1, 2022
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    Hi Mantas, here is a link to my new product 'Simpelr' on-demand graphic design service.
    https://simpelr.co/

    As for the tone of voice: Friendly and Caring

    Thank you in advance! I'd be happy to do the same for your landing page design.

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      Hi!

      • Love the word-play in the title. I'd drop the service, though. It adds nothing but length. Shorter = sweeter. Also, it's repeated in the subtitle.
      • The subtitle is a bit bland. Again, the "service" aspect is implied. I'd maybe go for something like "Premium graphic design—just a click away". This plays nice with your brand name, too.
      • You can make the main CTA even more specific. E.g. "Try it free for 7 days", "Free for 7 days", "Try it free". The word FREE never fails to get attention. And you don't need the brand name in there. Less of you, more of the value for the prospect.
      • "Unique designs that match your brand" -> "We play by the brand book"
      • "Request as many revisions you want" -> "As many revisions as you want"
      • "Get high quality designs fast & quick" -> "Top-shelf designs—fast"
      • As for the descriptions for each of these benefits—try to cut down on words. Or at least cut up long sentences into shorter ones.
      • "We design websites, logos, apps, ads -you name it!-" -> "We design websites, logos, app… You name it!"
      • "See our latest projects" -> "The fruit of our labor"
      • CTA "View more work" -> "See more examples"

      Overall, I like the straightforwardness of it. Sometimes the best way to sell your service is to say what it does for the prospect. No BS.

      Good luck!

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        Thank you so much Manats!

        You're right.

        I will definitely implement your recommendations.

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