Too kiddish? Or did I hit the spot?
I want to try and help more kids learn Entrepreneurship, though practice.
To do that, I've build Junior Boss (https://junior-boss.com).
Would love any feedback the IH community can give me on my landing page. I built this during the Design Camp by buildcamp.io (A design camp for people building apps using the nocode tool bubble.io)
My goal is to get 100 signups to the waitlist from parents and kids before spending weeks/months building too many features (unlike the last few times when that didn't turn out so well)
This is so interesting! In terms of feedback, I'd probably rephrase the main hero copy to something like: "Being the Boss isn't just for grown-ups," but I love the How-It-Works section.
However, I'm a bit confused regarding the 'Need a jump start' section - it feels like it's addressing adult business owners. Is that correct? I'm also not sure what purpose the section with ideas serves. It's fun, but I don't think it should be on your main lander.
Finally, because you're in the waitlist phase, I'd create and focus the landing page on a really good lead magnet. Maybe it's a virtual workshop, a webinar, a collection of resources for kids? In any case, a good magnet would definitely get those waitlist signups rolling.
Hope this helps!
@LanaRafaela - This is really great feedback. Thank you so much.
I tried so many different versions of the H1 copy and finally landed on the one I currently have, but yours is so much better - Shorter and to the point. Awesome.
Completely agreed on the "Need a jump start" and the "ideas" section. I'll have to take them out or make them crisper.
Also, working on figuring out what the perfect magnet would be. Great idea.
Thank you so much. This is incredible advice. I'll get right to work, making updates :)
I'm glad I could help! :) Feel free to reach out if you wanna talk out any ideas. Sounds like a really cool product!
I'm excited to present the new and improved Junior Boss. I definitely like this one better than the last one - with small but really impactful tweaks that you recommended. Your feedback was so helpful, thank you :)
I'm still working on figuring out a good magnet to get people to sign up. Would love to hear any idea you might have.
Glad it worked! :) It looks awesome and much clearer now. I just spotted a typo - instead of 'Lets' - it's " Let's " (short from "Let us").
As for the lead magnet, that's a good question! I see you're mentioning workshops in your footer, is that something that you still plan on doing? That might be interesting. Or a collection of resources for parents to start talking about entrepreneurship to their kids, maybe some exercises they could do together.
Thank you so much for all our help. Great catch on the spelling - I totally missed that since it was in the buttons.
Yeah a workshop is on my list, but haven't come around to it yet.
Something I am working on (along the lines of "resources" for parents) is an "Inspiration" page... Collections of videos, podcasts, articles, etc. of success stories - how other kids started and ran successful businesses (Presenting a thumbnail and key learnings in a card that can be clicked for more details).
I could show a rotating few on the landing page and use that as a magnet to get sign ups and then direct them to the complete resource.
I like that idea! :) Worth testing, and it's going to give you insights on what the most enticing lessons are before you launch the workshops.
First impressions:
Check out mine --> https://www.indiehackers.com/post/5s-understanding-and-first-impressions-e54fded74a
Thanks a lot @bigbb. I will look into the pixelation/blurry items on my page.
Checking out your post now.