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Updated after feedback, what do you think now?

by konradholubek

Hi IndieHackers,

After receiving feedback on my landing page I made some important modifications. What do you think? According to you, is the content and value proposition clear?

https://mytyteam.com

Looking forward getting your feedback !

Thank you,

konradholubek's avatarkonradholubek
on April 6, 2020
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    I don't know how your landing page looked previously but after checking out this version I have noticed 2 things:

    1. Grammar

    Mytyteam measures and tracks performance of remote teams to help manager easily spot red flags and operate a productive remote work environment.

    I'm not a native speaker but that doesn't sound right to me. Pretty sure that it should be "to help managers". Maybe you can give your copy to a native speaker to for proofreading.

    1. Presentation

    Honestly I couldn't tell what your actual product is about. Is it a Chrome extension? Web app? Slack bot? Really hard to say from your landing page alone.

    Hope that helps.

    tgel0's avatar tgel0
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    6 years ago
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      Hi @tgel0. Thank you for taking your time to give me feedback. I agree on the grammar : I made the correction.

      Presentation : I suppose I thought defining my product in the main title was sufficient. But I think you are right so I did some changes to make it more explicite

      • "Mytyteam measures and tracks performance of remote teams to help managers
        [..]" => "Mytyteam is a dashboard with metrics to measure and track performance of remote teams. [..]"
      • "Mytyteam provides you with the data and insight [..]" => "The Mytyteam dashboard provides you with the data and insight [..]"

      Is it more understandable like this?

      Thanks again 🙌

      konradholubek's avatar konradholubek
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      6 years ago
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