Would love feedback for our landing page on Gumroad for Restory:Annual. A year-end reflection handbook for a richer, fuller 2022.

by Tania D'souza 🧠+💜

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It's a very personal opinion but it gives a feeling of a blog post rather than a landing page.
You start with a title (good) but then you continue with 2 paragraphs which makes it more possible to lose people from the beginning.
Again personal opinion :D

moein

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  Thanks for the feedback. Valid point there. But our predicament is that we need to educate the people a bit on Reflective Journaling before we expect them to buy it. Not everyone might know what's it about. So it's more to provide context. Might look to make it a bit more crisper so we don't lose people's interest as you suggested.
  
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    You are definitely right
    I mainly mentioned that as a visitor landing on your page i have no idea who this page is for
    What is the problem you are solving?
    I had to scroll and read to see what it is about
    Maybe you could mention emotional well being from the beginning (you already have it in bold which catches the attention but i have to scroll to see it)
    
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      Thanks so much. Will do :)
      
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