Your first paragraph is vague. The role of the first paragraph is to get me engaged, curious, or relate to my problems (and make me read more). You failed at that sole purpose.
You put in too many commas - a problem I struggle with myself.
You don't give me a clear takeaway. My life has not improved as a result of reading your article, nor do I have a challenging new thought to ponder. I feel no reason to share it. You just want something from me (my money).
As for the distribution channel - find people who have a problem and solve it. In your case, what are people who are about to make an important decision asking about on social media? Will this article help?
I'm working on helping entrepreneurs do content marketing, and would love to hear if these two articles below helped you improve your writing in any way:
Yes, my article is SEO-focused but I guess it should be specific articles tailored to people making specific decisions instead of trying to catch them all with the general theory. I will definitely keep these points in mind for future writing, and happy to share your guides if I ever see someone who needs help with the same problem :)
As for the distribution channel - find people who have a problem and solve it. In your case, what are people who are about to make an important decision asking about on social media? Will this article help?
I'm working on helping entrepreneurs do content marketing, and would love to hear if these two articles below helped you improve your writing in any way:
Feedback welcome!
Wow! Thanks, that's great feedback and guides!
Yes, my article is SEO-focused but I guess it should be specific articles tailored to people making specific decisions instead of trying to catch them all with the general theory. I will definitely keep these points in mind for future writing, and happy to share your guides if I ever see someone who needs help with the same problem :)
Cheers, I'm glad it helped you gain a perspective. If there is anything I could improve in the guides please do let me know. Good luck with ThinkCool