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I'll suggest a better headline for your landing page ⚡️

Want to explain your product more clearly & effectively?

Send me your website below, and I'll give you suggestions on how you can improve your headline.

(I work as a designer, marketer & UX writer, so I'm trying to put my skills to the test!)

on April 8, 2022
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    What an amazing offer, thank you! Would love some feebdack on how to improve our messaging: https://www.veriply.io 🚀

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    Hi Alex, would love to get some ideas for https://blackish.com

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      Firstly, this idea is really neat & the site is super clean!

      I'd suggest making the first headline directly applicable to the target user. For example, you could repurpose the tagline you currently have on your footer: "Learn, sell, and grow as a creator."

      I'd also suggest trialling a different subheading; one that simplifies the product & reinforces the value prop. You have some great copy already, so you could again repurpose a paragraph that you use further down the page. For example: "Blackish is a community platform that helps creators kick-start their journey, build an audience and sell their products."

      Hope this helps!

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        Thank you! That's some great suggestion there. Going to work on another landing page and AB testing it

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          nice, let me know how it goes!